Cold Task

In class, we do a 'Cold Task' to find out what we already know. Our cold task was on a narrative. This is what I  have in 30 minutes.

We are to self-access our writing so we know what we are good at and what we need to improve on.

The two things I want to improve is putting figurative language and show not tell in my writing.

COLD  TASK TERM 2 2022 NARRATIVE 

Write a narrative, this could be a story you make up or a whanau story you retell. 
Name: Pana 

One afternoon, my cousins and I finished swimming at the beach because we had a batch near it. After our swim, we decided to go down to the swings. After these other people came down and started playing on the other swing. 

This boy came down on a scooter doing all sorts of things and showing off. My cousins and I were just swinging on the swing and looking at them. And the boy with the scooter, he was holding it on the back wheel, like he was trying to do a wheelie. 

The boy kept revving the scooter. Suddenly, he let the scooter go. VVVRRRMMM! The scooter slipped out of his hand, it flipped and landed with its tires facing up.

‘’It's going to turn off!’’ everyone shouted. ‘’It's fine it's not gonna turn off’’ the boy said. Just then the scooter putted out. Later the boy picked up the scooter and he had to walk it back to his house.