Thirst Hot Task

In class, we read Thirst, and our task was to make up our own ending to the story.

I think I have done the following well: Figurative language, show not tell

 Most exciting part

“Ryder!”, Dad yelled “You better get here right now!”. Ryder’s expression changed into a look of fear. “Oh no what should I do and where am I supposed to go?” Ryder said to himself. “I can't just stay here forever”. Ryder was hiding in a dead, dry tree where no one could find him because he knew what was coming for him. Tears threatened to burst from Ryder’s eyes. A shiver ran down his spine he knew he had to go soon. The more he hid, the more guilt flowed through him. Dad started to get worried because he thought that Ryder was long gone. Could he have been? The sun was setting, there was a pink and orange sky, but no sign of Ryder. Dad shouted once more. “Ryder please come back!” Dad cried out, “Just come home”. Ryder was like ice frozen in place; no matter what, he didn’t move. Suddenly… SNAP! A branch fell out of the tree. “No” Ryder whispered. Dad’s eyes quickly drew to the sound with his ears listening, his eyes looking and waiting for something to happen. But nothing. Not a sound.

Solution

It had been over an hour, Ryder’s legs were aching and he decided to go home. Maybe. His mind started to think of different things that could happen, he didn't want to imagine how that would go. A cold breeze curled around the trees giving Ryder goosebumps. Longing to go back home dad was searching and scanning the area. It was pitch black and dad wanted to look one more time for Ryder. “Ryder! Ryder! Come out please”, dad yelled. Ryder watched his dad as he was walking around with a torch while mum and Brooke joined to search as well. “Ryder where are you,” Brooke yelled. There was no answer. Ryder was tired he lied down on a thick branch and went to sleep with little things stabbing his back like a knife. The next day Ryder’s stomach was empty and it had been a cold. He gave up on hiding away from his family and he missed seeing them he also had been lonely for the last night, with the darkness strangling him.

Ending
Ryder climbed out of the tree and walked back home with scratches on him. When he got home his dad was on the couch frustrated he looked up to see a figure. It was Ryder. “Ryder!” dad cried. They both hugged with joy. Mum and Brooke woke up to see what the noise was. When they saw Ryder their eyes opened wide and they ran over to hug him. “Ryder!” Brooke said. “Ryder where were you? I thought that you were gone” mum sobbed. “I’m okay. I’m sorry for hiding from youse and stealing the water,” Ryder said “It's alright you didn’t mean to, but there will be a consequence for you” mum responded. Ryder understood what his mum was saying and they all had another warm embracing hug.